Review – First Draft

My script, Room 56 is based of extensive research. I wanted to make a huge impacted on the audience and ensuring they are left thinking about the messages and values, morals and concept of the play, so I did this by using a set of tools in the narrative structure such as time, creating strong enigma and relatable characters the audience could empathise with, these three points are what is going to make it powerful, detailed and engaging for the audience.

Development is something that can also be done to any aspect of a script, in my case being the first draft, development would be a massive improvement, and feedback would be the most effective way of understanding what type of development is needed. At the moment though there are a few development points which are clear and I will use to change the first draft of my script, an example of this is dialogue, although I want the speech to be short, meaningful and to the point, I also need to remember and consider that this is a performance and not a story, the audience needs to feel engaged and part of the play. Another example of an area of improvement is the narrative structure, which can be changed to implicate various other storyline for other characters; also I aim to improve areas of my text where a wide range of dramatic techniques and devices could be used if Room 56 was performed on a stage.

A clear example of how my development could take place in my first draft of the script is in the dialogue ‘Don’t you dare call me that.’ Which could be made into a longer more descriptive line with dramatic pauses and enigmatic anecdotes. I think this would make the audience engage more into the character of ‘Fiona’ as her traits will be seen through the things she says.

In my final piece I would like to achieve audience satisfaction, enabling the audience to feel a connection with the narrative and characters, and most importantly the themes addressed in the story. I would also aim to ensure the characters; sub slots and enigmatic pieces of the story are concluded in a thorough way.

Staging was considered mainly whilst writing my script as I pictured where each line could be performed, in what context and parallel with the lighting and possible music, an example of which is the narrative lines Fiona says at the beginning of the script, a spotlight could be used as she stands of high staging. Staging would be used alongside lighting to create different scenes, such as lighting half the stage for the hospital room and the other half as the flashbacks whilst the middle could be used for the narrative whilst the scenes are constructed either side in the dark of the stage.

In conclusion look forward to completing my script fulfilling the targets and challenges I have set for myself whilst also learning more about the issues in the story and working hard in character development.